February

This is my Chinese translation of Jeff’s poem:

二月

你我為愛更生
波紋重疊陰影
寒冬的臉薄了

(c) Mary Tang 2016

Translations from the English

February

And love changes us
Ripples rebuild a shadow.
Winter’s surface thins.

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About Mary Tang

An urban orchardist everyday, a volunteer regularly, a poet sometimes and a blogger since March 2015. I travel when I can. Food is a constant.
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10 Responses to February

  1. Love the haiku! I might change the last line to “Winter’s face has thinned.” Or “Winter’s surface thinned.” What was your reason for keeping the present tense there? Thank you.

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    • Mary Tang says:

      The English (present tense) is the original. I must admit my last line is past imperfect; as I am:) I simply read it that way in Chinese (fyi I am not a translator) Sorry if it offends.

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      • Offends! By no means. And I’m not an expert on Chinese poetry or translation, but doesn’t the last character ‘le’ indicate an action has already taken place, and in poetry especially, wouldn’t this be significant?

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        • Mary Tang says:

          I’m not an expert in Chinese poetry or translation either so I can’t comment on the significance of my using the ‘le”; I’ll leave it to the academics. However, its use can have a sense of ongoing action unless the verb is ‘die’ then using it means ‘dead’. For example, 它來了 can mean ‘it’s coming’ and not ‘it came‘. So 薄了can mean ‘is thinning’. As ‘thin’ is not a verb in Chinese, its translation as a verb in English is tricky. I should have said present imperfect, not past imperfect but I’m not sure if that is grammatically correct; I was only joking.

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  2. Laurie Graves says:

    Lovely!

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  3. Dalo 2013 says:

    Very well done ~ a great look into February.

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